Echo and Narcissus meet
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I just want to say how pleased I am to welcome Astranomik to our group of hubbers who have accepted the challenge of adding to Our Well of Wishes. Maggie May and I initiated the play, and we're so happy that other hubbers are interested in continuing it. I will write the next act, then Astranomik will continue from there. Again, anyone who wishes to participate and write an act, please say so! The only rule is that Echo and Narcissus remain characters. You may change the scene, setting, and time period in addition to adding characters. Again, thank you for stopping by!
CHARACTERS:
NARCISSUS, our beautiful man child, still airheaded, still a dancer. Image portrayed by Mark Sanchez, with some tendencies from Augustine A. Zavala.
ECHO,young nymph who's going make that horse drink (Narcissus). Image portrayed by Hilary Rhoda.
Ms. NEM ESIS, boss lady who own's Smyna's Cabaret and God and Goddesses, still working on teaching Narcissus a lesson. Image portayed by Julianne Moore.
AMEINIAS, another pretty boy dancer. Image portrayed by Thomas jane.
PAN, the lecherous satyr who schemes to KNOW Echo. Image portrayed by the dirty old man who lives down the street.
ACT FIVE, SCENE I: The edge of the radiating pool within the ruins of the Thespian fields.
Narcissus has been lured to the pool, but has forgotten why he is there. Like an Argonaut drawn to the call of the Sirens, his mind and thoughts have been intoxicated with the sensual sounds of a nymph. He collapses in place, slumping at the edge of the well. He feels compelled to slow down, to stop moving, to slide into the pool. He head begins to feel heavier, his eyelids droop, and he slowly, but gently begins to lean forward into the water. Echo has drawn Narcissus closer, but MS. Nem Esis has come to collect her due. Narcissus is entranced, and slowly falls forward as commanded. His long, dark locks touch the water first, and then his face pierces and breaks the surface of the spring. His body tenses, then seizes, fighting to pull away, but to no avail. He is completely consumed, and slowly slips into the depths of the well. As his body slides into oblivion; plants and foliage around the well begin to wilt and die. The demise of a God effects all living things nearby.
All of a sudden, Narcissus is launched to the surface of the well! Clenched around his neck are the arms of Echo. Her lips locked onto his, her breath giving him life, granting him release from MS. Nem Esis’s trance. Narcissus begins to regain his consciousness, still with Echo’s arms and legs wrapped around him. Water nymphs have come to Echo’s aid, and helped her save Narcissus, floating them both to the edge of the pool. Echo pulls Narcissus on land, and then shoos her cousins away before they start falling in love with him. The new couple lie together, Narcissus still groggy from the spell. MS Nem Esis, a witness to the entire spectacle, decides to withdraw and allow the new couple a moment of peace. Top billing at the club will be decided, just not today.
Narcissus opens his eyes, and for the first time looks into the eyes of another. He is mesmerized by the smoky eyes of Echo, and he slowly begins to drink in her appearance. Never did he know or consider that there were others just as beautiful as he. She sits poised next to him, perched as if ready to fly away. Through all her lamenting and her outcries, she never thought she would be in the arms of the man she's loved from afar. Narcissus begins to speak.
Narcissus: So, are you the one who I wished to know and pay attention to? Or are you a nymph who just fell out of Olympus? Cause I'm cool with both.
Echo: I am an Oread, a mountain nymph. I have loved you from afar. I have begged and pleaded to know you. Your are my destiny, I exist only to love you.
Narcissus: Do you like Eskimo's?
Echo: My lord, what is an Eskimo?
Narcissus: I'm not really sure, the only thing I know is that they make the best pies. There is much you need to learn. I will teach you.
Narcissus and Echo recover, and walk to his car in the parking lot. Echo looks in amazement at his horseless carriage, the environment, the world in which Narcissus lives. She absorbs all the details, and begins to comprehend Narcissus and his manner of speech. During Narcisuss's dunk in the well, all his "modifications" washed away. No more gemmed sword or disco balls. He doesn't seem to notice or care. His ears are popping because his brain is beginning to expand and exercise. He's begun thinking of someone other than himself. They drive away towards his apartment.
SCENE II: The upper lounge of "God and Goddesses," another club owned by Ms. Nem Esis.
Ms. Nem Esis had had a busy day. The life of a real Goddess isn't easy. She was compelled by the prayers and outcries of her followers to rid them of Narcissus. As a business woman, however, she was in a quandary. Narcissus made good money for her, and although her stable is full of studs, very few can match the total package that he had. The fiasco at the well was only the beginning, more headaches will be forthcoming.
Suddenly, theres knocking at the door to her office.
Ms. Nem Esis: Who is it? I'm in a bad way today, enter at your own risk.
Ameinias: Hello boss lady. I've done my set, and was hoping to speak to you privately.
Ameinias was another up and coming dancer. Except he was a real dancer. Actually trained to be in ballet. Very graceful, very handsome. But women were not his focus, he played for the other team. He was a pitcher and catcher. He liked poles and not holes. If you haven't surmised as such, he's gay. Not that there's anything wrong with that.
Ms. Nem Esis: Yes, dear. Please come in. Now, what's going on in your pretty little head?
Ameinias: Let me just say that you look F-A-B-U-L-O-U-S!! May I have your Jimmy Choo red crocodile pumps when you die? And your Alyce evening dress, I feel like I'm looking at the slender version of Venus. You shimmer like a star.
Ms. Nem Esis: You my boy are a treasure. I needed that, thank you. I feel wishes coming on, what is your hearts desire?
Ameinias: I desire to be you. However, the reason why I came here is to make a request. I've danced here at the club, and have flourished here because of your kindness. I wanted to take my dancing to a new level, and you allowed me to do just that. I mean, where else would I be allowed to do a MY version of "Waiting for Godot" in the buff? No where. Why? Because no other venue has the class that this place does. What I wanted to ask is to be Narcissus's understudy. I would be willing to dance for women.
Ms. Nem Esis: Why Narcissus?
Ameinias: Well, he's spectacular! He's perfect in all ways. I've wanted to be under him for like ever! I want to study him, to watch him, to feel him. He's the bestus dancer, and it would be my honor. I'll do him for free. I mean I'll do it for free.
Ms. Nem Esis: Well, Narcissus is taking a personal day today. One of his dust bunnies died. I will take it under advisement, and will let you know soon.
Ameinias: (SQUEAL!!!) You are a Goddess. Can I brush your hair?
Ms. Nem Esis: Now your too much. I'll call for you soon.
Ms. Nem Esis dismisses Ameinias. This may be the break she's be looking for. If she could get Ameinias trained to dance for women, then she may be able to survive without Narcissus. She pours herself a glass of port, and begins to ponder.
Ms. Nem Esis feels like lounging after the day she's just experienced. She walks into her bedroom and changes. When she walks back into her lair, she notices a figure leaning against her doorway. She'd recognize that smell anywhere. The figure standing in her doorway is Pan the satyr. He's the most hedonistic creature ever born or devised. He only has three friends, hungry, horny, and thirsty.
MS. Nem Esis: Well , well, well. Looks like the Future Farmers of America have lost their mascot. What on earth had ever given you the impression that you are welcomed or even allowed here?
Pan: Come on baby, don't be like that. Why you got to be so mean to me? Is it because of what happened in Pompeii? If I had known the city would be decimated by Mt. Vesuvius, I wouldn't have left you tied up on the bed.
MS. Nem Esis: You left my old self, Adrastea, tied to the bed. You are now adressing Nem Esis, the reborn goddess of vengeance. You see this pinch of sand between my finger tips? You have until the last grain is gone to state your purpose. If your still here, then I'll have my old beau Thanatos deal with you. I have him on speed dial.
Pan: ALLRIGHT!! EASY, EEAASSYY. I've come by to discuss the situation with Echo and Narcissus.
MS. Nem Esis: What situation is that?
Pan: Word in the realm is that you attempted to rub out Narcissus in the Thespian Fields. All because of the nymph Echo. That's why I'm here. I've had my share of Nymphs and Goddesses, but I have a thing for her. I believe we share a common goal, the removal of Narcissus.
Ms. Nem Esis: I acknowledge nothing. I know not what you speak. The only thing I know is that Echo has called on me regarding some man troubles.
Pan: Be that as it may, I'm asking permission to work with the pole vaulter Ameinias. I know I can use him to aid us with our "problem." If necessary, I can go gay for a bit of time. I'll do whatever or whomever necessary so that I can get me a piece of that Echo.
Ms Nem Esis: Allright, we have a deal. On one condition, no harm is to befall Ameinias. The new season of "Basketball Wives" is coming on TV. We always have pedicure parties while watching it. Now, begon. And don't touch anything on your way out.
Pan makes his exit. Ms Nem Esis is beginning to feel like the fates have come to her side. She finishes her glass of port, and retreats to the master bedroom for some rest. She'll need it for the days that will follow.
SCENE III: Narcissus's bachelor pad at "The Elysian Fields" apartments.
From the very moment the couple have left the Thespian Fields, Narcissus has been jabbering on like a monkey. For the entire ride to his apartment, he has been telling Echo his views and knowledge on everything. She has been listening intently for the 30 minute ride home, and her interest never once waned. As they walk into his apartment, he continued.
Narcissus: AND that's why buffaloes can't fly; it's because we keep eating their wings. Well, here we are. Mi casa is su casa. That means my house is a super house.
Echo: Well, looks like an interesting place. Where I come from, it reminds me of where goats sleep.
Narsissus: Babe, would you like to meet someone who is dear to my heart? HE's been there for me through thick and thin, through good times and bad. He always listens, never makes me feel bad for anything I've done wrong. He's been like a mentor to me.
Echo: My lord, your friend is my friend. I wish to know everyone you hold dear.
Narcissus: Well, close your eyes. I want it to be a surprise.
Echo: They're closed.
Narcissus: OK, OPEN THEM UP!! CH-CH-CH-CHIA! It's my chia pet! His name is Cerberus.
Echo: Isn't Cerberus the hound that guards the gates of Hades??
Narcissus: Well?! Don't you think he's cool?! Look at those eyes!
Echo: Narcissus, is this a vessel? A vase? A cistern?
Narcissus: I don't know his breed, the only thing I know that I love him more than Trix Cereal. And that's a lot of love. Listen, I need to go see boss lady and tell her about the mission she sent me on. I think I'm getting a prize for my effort I think. Why don't you two get aquainted. Pss, whatever you do, don't stare at him when he goes to the restroom. He's shy.
Narcissus leaves Echo at the apartment, and begins his drive to see Ms. Nem Esis. Echo places Cerberus on the table. She begins cleaning the apartment, making into a lovers lair fit for the harem of a king. She has taking in alot today, and still is enthralled with Narcissus. She's here to stay, and no manner of trickery or witchcraft will take her away. Or so she hopes. However, she has interrupted Ms. Nem Esis in exacting vengeance. She will have to meet with with her soon, or Narcissus may remain in danger.
Scene IV: The upper lounge of "Smyrna's Cabaret."
Ms. Nem Esis is back at Smryna's. She got restless at the other club, and needed to release her tension. She called for one of the new dancers so that she could inititate training. The newbie wasn't expecting, nor was he ready for what "training" entailed. He freaked out, and Ms. Nem Esis has him on the couch, comforting him.
Ms. Nem Esis: There, there my darling. Your in a safe place now, momma is here and she's wanting to make you feel better.
Dancer: Bu..but why did you whip the hell out of me?!! I only wanted to take a breath!
Ms. Nem Esis: Baby, darling. I didn't give you permission to breathe. In training your do as your told. There are no questions, there are no exceptions. As your master, I tell you when to breathe, to think, to lick, etc.
Dancer: And the whip and suit, the chains, the paddling, the horror...
Ms. Nem Esis: You'll find that it's not that horrible, for me. And after you complete your training, the kegals, and the tongue push ups, you'll be ready to fully satisfy my cult followers. Then you'll see that all your pain wasn't just for my pleasure. It also serves my purpose. Now, there's a tub of marble slab chocolate ice cream in the fridge. Go make us a bowl so that you can watch me eat it.
Narcissus arrives at the club, and enters the breakroom. He looks at the schedule, and notices that he hasn't been booked, and that his scheduled days state "On Leave." Puzzled, he phones the upper lounge to ask boss lady a question.
Ms Nem Esis: Is this important?
Narcissus: Boss lady, this is Narcissus. I got back from one of your labors and did what I was told. I had a question about my schedule. It said that I was on leaves. Didn't you have a landscaper service for taking care of the leaves for the club?
Ms. Nem Esis: Narcissus!? Yes, yes my dear. We have landscapers for that. I have you listed "On Leave" because I have another mission for you. I want you to find Ameinias, he's another dancer from the other club. I want you to train him to be a dancer. He's good, but your gooder. Go find him and help him fulfill his destiny. I left your paycheck on the breakroom table, and your bonus, a box of Trix next to it.
Narcissus: Score!! Thank you boss lady!!
Narcissus get's his check and bonus and heads over to meet Ameinias.
© 2011 Augustine A. Zavala
Ode to Ms. Nem Esis
Here's the link to the first act of this play by Maggie-May:
The second act by yours truly:
The third act by Maggie-May:
The fourth act by Nikkij504gurl:
Part 6 by Kallini2010
- Narcissus and Echo. Never Together, Never Apart
A phantasmagorical detour in the story of Narcissus and Echo. A never ending story of love, life and the search for the meaning. Of...? You decide.
Part 7 by Astranomik
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Ian, hubpages thought that very same thing! Are you sure your not a moderator here? The greek gods were a lecherous bunch, but I did clean it up a bit. Thank you for the visit!
Wow, my friend, this is really quite the Master Piece! What a Production and Pictures...It left me almost Speechless. It is Awesome! Voted Up! Up! and Away!
Are you sure they did?
Yipes!
Of course I'm a moderator here. I want to see (and read) more mucky stuff.
Bring it on.
B.malin, thank you for the awesome comment. I worked really hard on this hub, and I'm especially glad you enjoyed it. I'll be writing the next installment, then Astranomik will write the next act. Again, thank you so much for visiting.
Ian, I released this hub a week and a half ago, but have been fighting with hubpages over the pictures and content. It was brutal. But now my baby is published; now I can go to sleep tonight. I will be writing the next act, then Astranomik will write hers. Thank you so much for your support.
...greatest hub ever - after of course, your trilogy of bizzare record album covers and your affectionate hub tribute to one of your favorite bands (and mine) the Smiths - and this grand collaboration of yours even includes the lovely ASTRANOMNIK - real sweet, says the epi-man ....and Maggie May too!!!!
lake erie time 11:37pm and Happy Canada day from your neighbor ......
EPIGRAMMAN, GOOD EVENING! Thank you for the kudos. I released this hub last week, but was fighting with hubpages to get it released. Now it is done. I have some catching up to do, and some visits to make to some hubs, including yours! I want to pay each their due before I start on the next act. Thank you for your continued support, I certainly appreciate it!
This is the sexiest hub ever made. I really enjoy this hub and all pictures here. Thanks for writing and share with us. Cheers....
Prasetio
Augustine (and Ian):
I don't see any porn here. Not even close to soft porn. As innocent as it could be. Maybe because I started reading Greek Mythology at age nine - talked about depravity!
I take it, Augustine, you really like Julianne Moore.
There was a film that left a very strong impression on me and I think Julianne Moore played the heroine (but I am not quite sure, maybe I am constructing reality here) - the film was based on a true story when a woman having divorced her husband ends up taking her son as a lover (first, as a consolation, then?). He ends up killing her. Yes, I just looked it up "Savage Grace". Very disturbing.
I like Julianne Moore, too. There is something about her.
I am so sorry to hear that you had to fight with HP over such innocent piece as this.
I even like your Narcissus - he is just a child - we tend to be amused and lenient towards children - what else can he do? It probably was not his fault he is stuck in his childhood. Maybe it is the ill of society that is reflected in him?
Time to write a strong social proclamation: "America! Your sons have been exposed to the video games that help produce mass idiocy! Wake up, citizens!" Or something like that.
No, I mean it, poor guy.
Prasetio, your always there with praise and encouragement. I appreciate the support, and I'm glad you enjoyed reading this. I'll be writing the next act, then Astranomik will be following next. As always, thank you for the visit.
Kallini, it was a battle of the images used for this hub. They identified a couple of images as being "strategically nude." They were images of Hilary Rhoda in which she covered her breast with her hands. HP just sent me the generic email regarding adult content. I had to press them for a more specific explanation. After some wrangling, I was able to finally get it published.
Narcissus is a man child, and he was never forced to answer for his actions. He's a fun loving, air headed mimbo. In the next acts for the play, I'm hoping to get him to grow up and see his place in his world.
I like Julianne Moore, but the reason I chose her image is because of her portrayal in "Boogie Nights" as a porn star. There were more images of her that lent itself to the sultry Nemesis. Nemesis had a cult, and they would gather in the city of Smyrna to worship at her temple. I'm doing everything I can to keep the story line as close to the mythos as possible. Don't feel to bad for Narcissus, I have a feeling he will make you proud in the end.
"Strategically nude" - what an expression. What an expression!
There are tons of images on the internet, I think there is a difference between "good taste" and "bad taste".
Nudity is nudity - I am with Ancient Greeks on that one - they are so STRATEGICALLY NUDE in all the museums - with all their strategic parts on display.
They also bathed nude. For all prudes out there, I would recommend a few visits to a nudist beach - when they have no safety net of the best swimming suit - it removes the headaches how to choose the best one (the most flattering one).
After a few visits, everyone will realize that nudity as such has very little appeal.
By the way, your nymphs in the pond - are they strategically nude or somehow else?
I can't help feeling like that towards your Narcissus - at this stage - I just think - it is not really his fault. And I will tell you whose fault it is...
This is totally mesmerizing, Augustine. The voice you give to Narcissus is hilariously insipid and childlike and despite his career aspirations, he appears naively innocent. Brilliant trip into Mythology. I see far more leanings toward pornography in the fashion rags I love so much. Ms. Moore is frequently the discreetly, artsy, unclothed subject of regular advertisements accompanied by exotic cats. I would have to say the intent behind pornography is what defines it as such and that intent is not what I take away reading your captivating story. I can't wait to read the rest!
Good heavens Ms. Augustine but your talents do go far. From laughing me rear off to another..ahem, pleasurable read and view.
You know, Augustine, what intrigues me, why people say so much praise, but they don't vote up and give a "useful/funny/awesome/beautiful" mark? No, really, why?
I am smiling still, and I loved every word, every image, and the whole "feel" of this hub and all the preceding ones. They are heading in a great direction, and *gulp!* flocking like those Jurassic Park creatures in my direction. LOL. Looks like I am writing part 6. And I am trying not to be nervous. *bites nails nervously* LOL.
I am surprised about the moderation. I have some ideas about the way things are going and you seem to have a handle on things. I love how the collaboration has gone so far.
And your sense of humor is inspiring. I will have to really dig deep to ever try to top this. Ha. Well done on a great story and great characters that we can all love and relate to and enjoy.
And can people please get in on this and rate this up. It's a great series of hubs.
Kallini, I know! I think hubpages disabled the voting button because of my rant over the hub. Anyhoo...
I have enough material to write the next act, I have a story line and plot ready. I'm glad your fond of Narcissus, I didn't want him portrayed as a chavaunistic a**hole. He's a stud whose view on life is simple. I think you'll enjoy the other acts.
Amy I'm glad you enjoyed it! He is a brainless stud who means no harm, and I believe Echo loves him because of it. I have a developing story line, and it will continue my trend of portraying Narcissus as a lovable idiot. As always, thank you for the visit!
Alastar, for the record, I'm all man. I saw the Ms and wasn't sure if you were aware. But I do get a bunch of junk mail addressed to Ms. Augustine. I wondered why I kept getting lingerie catalogs. I'm still keeping them. Thanks again for the visit.
haha this is great! lol made me laugh out loud a few times. Astra cant wait for your part. Im sure you will do fine. no worries.
Astranomik, thank you! Remember, I will write the next act also. I have enough material for another hub, barring any interference from hubpages. Once I write and release it, then you can take over with the next act. You'll do fine! Your a gifted writer with a unique view. Maggie and Nikki had a different view on the story, and it was reflected in their hubs. Just be yourself. Your audiance demands it!
Nikki, Thank you! I just told Astra that I would write the next act, then she can take over. I hope you like my version of Ameinias; I hope more in store for him in the next hub.
This is a BIG departure for you... I like the idea of sharing the writing of a play... interesting.... very! lily
Lilyfly, I was just thinking about you. Mckbonz emailed me today. She has good days and bad days.
I had been working on this forever, and it took forever to release. I wanted to participate in your poetry collaboration, but I haven't been reflecting lately. I hope I can start relaxing and create some real art. How cold is it in Wasilla?
You are really talented and I like the way you wrote this. You put sensuality and soft porn together in a great way in this story! Voted up, beautiful, awesome! Thanks for great description of personalities and the act!
Tina
Good Morning! Congrats that you got this hub done and it is now published. It is certainly well written and creative, that's an art in itself. From the original PLAY it has transformed into something of a whole new creation/identity... Although Nars remains a handsome manchild he still is somewhat of a male chauvinist and his child like ways do not hide or make it better. This is indeed great work Augustine and your talents are numerous, I hope Astro and Nikki can compete with this one, I don't think I can, but much luck to you three..Love the pictures too. I am heading to part one and will link this new one....Have a great weekend, and once again great work!!! MM
Wow, what a hot Hub and full of juicy and lovely characters all oozing life and sexual chemistry mixing around here a-plenty. This is definitely pushing all my buttons! LOL! This would be a great Theater production and even TV series or Movie. Remember the Leonardo Di Caprio "Romeo and Juliette"? This could wind up in the that place or something like it. Anyway this is awesome and I am coming back for more. And Astra Nomik doing a future Hub? This is going to be great.
Augustine, You and all the collaborating writers have done an amazing job. Bravo! Rating this so UP! :) Pressed all the tabs here today!
Good afternoon Tina! It is a strip club setting, but I didn't want to make it too seedy. There is a love story hidden in there, and I think it will end well, or maybe not. As always, thank you for your support!
Good afternoon Maggie. Chauvaunistic? Remember, Narcissus has cared only for himself up to this point. With the addition of Echo to his life, I have a feeling that he will be receiving training on having a relationship. I have a feeling he'll be the man that Echo will love. Please don't pull out the Hilda broom yet!
Cheeky girl, thank you for your support! I will write the next act, then Astranomik will debut with her act. Everybody participating is completely different from each other, and this will make the series interesting, funny, and great. The invitation is open, and your more than welcome to join if you like. Again, thank you for your support.
This is what i call a HOT hub and it's great, PHEW, That picture with the Dude and the towel around his neck, kinda makes me want to hit the beach. Voted up and 'gooder
LMAO!! Good one Ruby! I'm glad you found this hub gooder. That was my intent. The image is that of Mark Sanchez, he's the quarter back for the New York Jets. I know you don't smoke, but if you need to smoke one after looking at his image, we understand.
Augustine, how much strategical nudity is allowed? If I send you a picture, can you tell me? It is decent. Actually it is on my FB. I'll post and you can delete it later.
kallini, of course. Send me the link or share with me on facebook. I can tell you whether or not you'll make waves on hubpages.
It was well worth the wait. yes Cathy(astra nomik) told me you would be writing the next one as well and then her. Cant Wait! I will add the link to this one to my part too. and Hopefully I can write part...8? lol
Nikki, of course. I wanted to write the next act because I have enough material to continue the plot. But after I submit, I'll be needing an eskimo pie for all my effort. I hope to have it done soon, and I hope to continue the streak of being absolutely ridiculous.
haha. I could mail ya one? lol
I'm eating one now, but need to be careful. Trying to get ready for the beach, I want to be a sungod.
I am just loving everything being written by you guys and gals. Oh that beach sounds so appealing now...summer is like a steak in the oven out there, piping hot. LOL. :)
yea it is blistering hot out there but the ocean is the right temp and it feels so nice. I saw a jelly fish right next to me on my trip to the beach over the weekend. I screamed and ran away lol
I visit my brother, and we go fishing in the surf near Beaumont, Texas. The last time we were in the ocean, we were both chased out of the surf by a 6 foot shadow in the water. There are alot of bull sharks in the area. We caught six or seven black tip sharks and a hammerhead. My brother also caught a 4 foot redfish. We had a bunch of fun.
On another trip we took an ocean kayak out, and it was surreal once you get past the surf. It got real quiet, then I saw a huge shadow coming up near where I was at. It was a friggin porpoise! It freaked me the hell out. I almost tipped the kayak over. And then, all of a sudden, I began to play the soundtrack to Jaws in my head. I began top panic, and I was paddling furiously to the beach. I jumped out of the kayak and lept onto the beach. Everyone was looking at me like I was an idiot. I was...
haha that must have been something! I would have been scared too. Bullsharks, if I ever see a shark up close and personal in the ocean, idk if I will ever go back in lol. I want to go scuba diving but I know I will be scared Crapless lol
WHATEVER YOU DO, DON'T PLAY THE JAWS SOUNDTRACK IN YOUR HEAD WHILE SCUBA DIVING!
I think I would throw up in my scuba mask if I tried imagining that music in my head. The shark in my head would get me for sure. LOL. Try thinking of some nice calm guitar music...like the Cavatina from the Deer Hunter. Just make sure Robert De Niro is not nearby with a large gun.
Scuba diving is fun, Nikki. Try the snorkeling first, then work your way up and do a scuba course. Under water is another world totally. :)
haha I would be the one to do that just like you haha. Oh yea I think thats scarier than the shark. Niro with a gun..Aggghhh lol
Oh yes I know I love under water. Sometimes I wish I was a mermaid. lol
I would love to scuba, just have the worst luck of anyone doing anything. My nickname in the army used to be "El Gato Negro" which means the black cat. ANything I plan to do normally goes wrong. The last time I went to the beach, Hurricane Ike decided to visit at the same time. I had to evacuate from the beach, and it took me 8 hours to drive 150 miles because everyone else was evacuating also.
I think I should face my fears. They have shark tours in the Bahamas. Maybe I can see if they could arrange for me to get attacked by nurse sharks or baby sharks. I'm not an idiot, of course I would wear a chain mail diving suit. Once I get ravaged by these beast and survive, then I could stop being afraid of being attacked. Hell, I could even get a bumper sticker made saying I was attacked by a shark and survived. I would be willing to let the Discovery Channel film my attack, you know, for the children.
Augustine yuu are hilarious. lol I know exactly what you mean, I dont even like making plans because things never go as planned, the most fun is when you wing it. randomly decide to do something, and it usually ends up being much better, than if you had planned it. but some things you kinda have to plan, like when to go to the beach, you should check the weather, which i like never do. it started raining on my way to florida, but luckily it wasnt raining in florida. We should all face our fears, idk if i want to willingly get attacked by sharks but just going scuba diving with them is enough, with a trained scuba diver armed with a harpoon lol. just in case.
There is a lot to be said about facing your fears, folks! Oh crap I think there's a mouse in the kitchen! Eeeeek!
That aside, Augustine - that proposition you put to me earlier, re the hub on Narcissus - is it still open? As I am inclined towards the affirmative... But if not, no worries whatsoever! It's a very wonderful invite, and I thank you kindly for considering me! Cheers!
Cheeky girl, absolutely! Your are welcome to add an act, and we appreciate your contribution. I will write the next act, then Astra. Then you and Nikki can decide which one would go next. I can't wait to get your perspective. I sent information to Astra, if you need me to send you resources just let me know. You can change setting and time and add characters. The only thing we ask is that Echo and Narcissus remain characters. Thank you so much for joining the effort!
yay Cassy is joining the play! it will be awesome, you can go after Cathy if you like. since I have already done a part. so Augustine then Cathy and then Cassy.
EXCELLENT. My work schedule has been hectic due to the consolidation going on at work. My schedule has been variable, both day and night. I have the story and plot, and will flesh it out and try to submit as soon as possible.
Enthralling! What more can I say? Writing and reading acts like this is good for one’s health :)) Indeed beautiful people in the pictures you’ve chosen! I feel twenty years younger after this read :)))
Martie, long time no see! I'm glad you enjoyed this act. It's been entertaining, and we've added other writers to flesh out the acts. I know we can maintain the momentum and continue to create good work. Yes, I wanted to make sure there was enough eye candy for anyone who wished to visit. I'm kind of partial to Echo and Nemesis. I will write the next act, and then guest authors Astranomik, Cassie, and Nikki will follow suit. We'll see what happens from here. As always, thank you for the visit.
Augustine, thanks for this. I accept! What can I say? I am delighted to hear this! *Grinning widely here* And thanks for having me on board! I am eager to get stuck in. I'll wait patiently for your next amazing installment and Cathy (Astra) can write hers and then me, if that is okay! I got the info from Cathy and I will leave Echo and Narcissus intact as you wish. I have a few interesting ideas but they will depend on what comes before my submission. I love the "camp" humor here, and Narcissus is lovable already! :)
And thanks also to Maggie and Nikki. Cheeky Girl changing her name for today to "Happy Girl"! Cheers!
Cheeky girl, thank you! Camp is the word. I had envisioned this play in the similiar thread as Volunteers, Caddyshack, and the Man with One Red Shoe. I know you can only make it better.
On the one hand, Narcissus gets so much attention that he lives up to his reputation,
on the other hand - he is no longer the Narcissus from the myth.
Fine either way.
He blooms like the Narcissus the Flower.
Absolutely Kallini. The Narcissus of lore never acknowledged Echo, and fell in love with himself. So attracted to his own image, he died from it. Echo faded away, until nothing more than her whisper left behind. Pan the satyr wanted Echo so badly, in one version of the mythos he became enraged when she rebuffed him. He became so enraged that he instructed his followers to tear Echo into pieces. I hope to do these myths justice, and to foster interest into mythology. As always, thank you Kallini.
Well, I have always loved Greek mythology - it is quite intricate. Pure story-telling.
After you said :
"I'll do whatever or whomever necessary so that I can get me a piece of that Echo."
it stuck in my head - I am not going to do whomever, maybe not even whatever - but now when I see "a piece of that Echo" - a man with abs - I think...
I think a man with abs is in every womans vision. Strong abs do make bedroom gymnastics much more easier and exciting. However, the body is only the vessle, a vehicle. It's only one facet of the man. So, most women strive to find their golden fleece. A multi faceted man. A man with abs, intellect, intelligience, and possibly obediant. Does such a man exist? I'm just looking for woman who isn't mean.
I had a man with abs today. But he could not lead - in tango lesson.
What I did not expect that I had to be in close embrace with him - from head to bottom - V-shape - chest to chest - we were hugging and holding on to dear life -
but as I thought about my options - if I had to dance with some other men in class - it meant that I had to lean on them... brrrr....
What do you mean? Are all women mean?
I am not mean. I know I am one of a kind, but there must be others who are not mean.
Good point - most men like my kindness - now that I have to think of it.
Too creative and awesome! I'm jealous I haven't been asked to be included in something so cool!
Kallini, do you chose your dance partners in class? What's is the worst attribute besides bad dancing that you hate in a dance partner? Are there really lonely dance mates that try to follow you home? Yes, you are nice, and you enjoy fostering discussions.
Kittydreamer, you have been formally invited to participate in our ongoing play. No, there is no hazing process, no monthly due or fee committment. There are a couple of expectations. You must have fun, and we ask that Narcissus and Echo remain the main characters. But that's it. You may change the time period, add characters, change the mood.
Everyone who's participated has written from their own perspective. Maggie May had infused romance and elegance to her version. As you can see from my version, well, you know. Nikki girl added a bit of darkness, and a gay character that I will have fun with. In the story. Not that kind of fun. Astranomik and Cheekygirl have graciously accepted offers to write acts. I wait with bated breath for their versions of the play. They're very talented.
If you accept the invitation, I can send you resources regarding some of the characters and deities in Greek mythology. You can bone up and start thinking of your theme. Thank you for the kind words!
I almost feel tempted to join the pool of writers - topless. (Kidding! About topless...) Maybe trying to write something fun will do me good.
But my writing might be too much for the regular audience - if I start sliding downhill, there is nothing that can stop me - I end up laughing and entertaining myself.
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About bad dancing partners:
"Bad" is a bad word, it tells you nothing.
When I say "bad", I mean that the man cannot lead. It is a very fine balance between being firm yet gentle and the skill matters.
Dancing with someone who cannot lead (it comes down to "cannot dance") is a torture.
But it is not easy to learn, not everyone have the aptitude. I think women have it much much easier.
But there are, of course, other "qualities" that may not be "dance related" - bad breath, for example. It does not make a person a bad dancer - it makes a man undesirable/unacceptable.
It is hard to explain. It is what you feel.
Besides there is some "chemistry/rapport" between partners, sometimes it just does not work. "I cannot dance with him" - something like that.
In Argentine tango, the way the first lesson went - we did not rotate partners (in Salsa we always did), that way you were never stuck with someone awful.
I did not pick - we were standing next to each other and ended up as a pair. He is younger (maybe even twenty years younger, athletic, dances hip hop, but he never danced in a couple). He cannot figure out the right way to signal what foot to move - I see nothing - I look the other way and go backwards maintaining balance on one foot (heel does not touch the ground. Yes, right), leaning forward (lying on his chest, all upper frame) and to the side.
At the end of the class, I told him "There is nothing left to do, but to get married." He jumped away. But seriously, my arm was hurting so much, I could not hold it any longer. And I did not even HEAR the music, I could not enjoy it - all I was trying to do figure out when, what foot to move. And of course, we were stepping on each other - he more so, because he did not have dancing shoes.
I should do my "balancing exercises" tomorrow.
Sorry, it became too long a story.
I read today's Mr. Happy treatise on German philosophy - mind-blowing.
I hope you get some sleep or rest or at least have a good week-end.
Kallini, you may decide to join at anytime. I know your schedule and time is at a premium. Just let us know when your ready to join the fracas. Do not worry about your version of the the act should you decide to join. The only thing we ask is that you enjoy writing and devising some mischief for Narcissus and company.
I think it's time for me to learn how to dance. I enjoy music, and I move to it. It wouldn't characterize it as dancing.
Yes, Augustine, the idea is certainly on my mind - remember when you told me the first time, I responded that I don't want another image of Narcissus as I was cherishing (wrong word, I know, but I am pressed for time) my own idea of him.
As far as dancing goes - there are options - solo or in a couple - the best thing - not to be afraid to look foolish... otherwise you will never be able to... If women are mean to you, choose those who are not - don't despair that someone does not like you or the way you dance. It is not about them, it is about you. In dancing, there is a lot of rejection - and I get it all the time. So?
If you really want to, you can. But what kind of dance do you have in mind? Latin? Ballroom?
There are few things I can hack more than rejection... or failure, So I seldom put myself in the position of having either happen to me.
I am a craven coward in that department, I suppose I was spoilt.
Ian, I have no choice. I am too sensitive about rejection and failure (I cannot stop being amazed at how many things we do have in common).
However, I was told - that truly successful people have "high tolerance for failure"
Fall down - get up
Fall down - get up
Fall down - get up
Fall down - get up
Fall down - get up
Did you ever watch a child learning to stand and especially walk - it is a process and an automatic one - a child does not question that he will learn. Nature made sure - he will.
I must employ the same strategy.
Rejection hurts as hell. I am training myself.
"Your criticism is not welcome, your acceptance is not required. Your charm has expired."
Sometimes I get as bold as to say it to the face of the person only if it gets nasty.
But all joking aside, failure is not a big deal and acceptance? You cannot be accepted by everyone nor can you accept everyone.
Think of it as a selection process
Yes - No - Yes - No - No - No - No - No - Yes.
Just wanted to say that the photo choices were spectacular! Well done!
Kallini, you didn't say anything wrong. It's easy for me not to want caviar since I've never had it. It does look delicious though. If I find out they've found a responsible way to balance harvesting the roe and helping farm the fish, then I may try.
As far as dancing, I like to dirty dance first, then ballroom, tango, waltz, Texas two step, and then the electric slide.
Again, should you wish to write an act, the invitation is always open.
Ian, as far as failure goes, it's different for everyone. I was afraid of it until it happened. After I realized that I lived and survived afterwards, then it caused me to become a bit more fearless. I strike out and take chances more, and find success. For the longest I was discouraged by the lack of traffic or attention my writing received. I felt like a failure, uncreative. Then I was contacted by the BBC last year to participate in an interview regarding step fathers. My interview wasn't used in the end, but the experience was energizing. I used that momentum to get to where I am now. Writing soft porn using characters from mythology. I've found my niche!
Anita, I'm honored by your comment. I hope my version of the Narcissus/Echo mythology hasn't tainted your love for the classics. I have another act coming before my fellow hubbers write their versions. I hope you find the chance to come back!
I will think about it, it is very tempting - though I might have no time. Still, but someone is writing the next part, right?
How many parts do you have as "work-in-progress"?
Sometimes it is hard for me - I am like a binge drinker - once I start writing it is hard to stop until I could write no longer, but when I stop and then try to plan "my creative activity" it does not work at all.
Well, I have to find a way...
I will write the next act, then Astranomik, Cheekygirl, and then Nikkigurl. Kitty the dreamer has expressed interest. MAggie May is also waiting to see how the play will progress before she writes another act. You can see what direction the story goes, and then decide. We're not in a rush.
I will start finalzing my act thsi week so the rest can start. The collaboration has exceeded my expectations, and I'm so happy that other writers wish to participate. I hope you find the time to join as well.
6 episodes?
It will be like "Friends" or "Sex and the City".
I will be checking progress, then.
more the merrier! Cant wait to see how the story "Pans" out. (get it? cuz one of the characters name is Pan)
The most romantic hub i have come across on hubpages. Great I wish i was a cast in the script.
Nikki, I didn't get it till now. When you said pan, I kept thinking of scrambled eggs. And of goats. Now I can't think of nothing else. Thanks alot Nikki!
Mitshell, thank you for the comment. This hub is a part of a mini series of hubs inititated by Maggie-May and I. Now we have other authors joining to add an act to our series. Keep reading and watching the next hubs that come out. If you like what you see and wish to add an act, just message me to let me know.
I am happy to know that I am not the only "serial killer" - I can write nothing but series...
Everything I write becomes larger than life...
Well, we've moved beyond a pilot play into a mini-series. As long as good material can be written, there's not telling how far it can go. I think there are many more facets than can be added to make this gem shine!
I am very new in this site and want to make a healthy relationship with everyone. I heard a story about Echo and Narcissus. But today I am watching in dreamy picture
OMG I need to start at the beginning. Will be back!
Sparron, thank you for the comment. Welcome, and I hope you enjoy writing and commentating on the site.
Justsilvie, take your time! I'm working on the next act now. I hope to make it as insane and comical as the others. Maggie May, Nikkigurl, Astranomik, and Cheeky girl have added and comitted to add additional acts. It's going to be quite a ride.
AA...this is absolutely wild...in a phrase: "ignorance is bliss." Funny! LOL funny! I love the dialogue...'ch ch ch ch chia..." and so many instances of "play on words," misunderstandings, lack of 'communication, and so much more. Very creative! Echo so enthralled w/Narcissis that she doesn't see the forest for the trees when it comes to brain power!
"Do you like Eskimos?" too hilarious! Mixing it up with time and history, current and past.
Funny, Awesome in the imaginative script and dialogue and character development.
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Kathy, I'm glad you found the opportunity to visit! Yes, there is a bit of progression from the fist acts written. I wanted to portray Narcissus as a lovable mimbo, not a chauvanistic jerk. I had the dialog rolling around in my head, and I'm glad it's been well received. I'll be writing the next act, then Astranomik and Cheeky girl will be writing the next act. A couple of other hubbers have expressed interest as well. I think Narcissus will make everyone proud in the end, but we'll see. As always, thank you for visiting.
"Echo and Narcissus meet" and all of a sudden it draws hubbers, writers and spectators from all over the web and a humble idea at the beginning becomes a hub of activity and a great meeting place. Echo has a long echo-cho-oooooo
Kallini, I know! This is my most successful hub lately. My acadamic hubs generated the most traffic for me, but the latest Narcissus hub has been the most searched and hit. Maybe Google loves Echo and Narcissus. I think the writing isn't too bad, and I hope it will be more humorous and interesting. I already have the final act in my mind, and I guarantee that it will draw everyones attention.
You will be a star! What do you mean a final act? I thought there is line, take a number!
Let others bask in the success.
"Narcissism" - new definition - obsession with reading the result of collaboration of the best huggers. Sorry, hubbers.
You can never go wrong with humour.
I shouldn't say final act, I mean the act that will settle once and for all whether Narcissus continues in his ways, or decides to start a new life with Echo. I have a story in mind that may bring tears of joy or sorrow. But it will be epic. But that doesn't mean that the story ends there. I believe that the play is popular, because everyone can identify with the traits portrayed in the characters. And I think the humor is good, but I may be partial to it. Narcissism, your definition is the bestus.
You know, I think I will participate in screen writing - it was always my dream. Put me in line. Por favor.
EXCELLENT. Once I get home, I'll send some mythological resources your way. Once Astranomik and Cheeky girl write their acts, then you can step in with your version on events. I wait with bated breath.
This is great stuff. I'm going to have to read all of it when I'm done doing...stuff.
Maureen, thank you for the visit. This is a colloaboration between myself, Maggie-May, and others who offered to write acts. You should read it from te beginning to see how we think. Thank you again for the comment.
I plan to. When I have more than 5 minutes at a time, lol.
Our Play is a hit!!! This is fabulous!!!! And, so glad people want to join in!!! A fantastic turn, Bravo Augustine!!!!
MM, we have found a successful formula. Now, if we could get paid it, then I could water my chia dog with real water instead of just acting like it. All the seeds on it's body makes it looked diseased. On my way home, 2.5 hours away. Thank you for the visit, it's always welcomed.
Great hub,nice post
Htodd, thank you for the comment. This is a collaboration between some hubbers and myself. If you have the opportunity, please take time to visit those hubs as well. Again, thank you for the visit.
AAZavala-good for you for having the tenacity to see the 'corrections' through and post this very clever version of the story of Echo and Narcissus. Enjoyed and rated up / interesting.
I've added a link to my hub: Whispers of Truth. Second poem is called: Narcisstic Love
Denise, thank you for the comment. This series had really gained momentum, and I'm excited by the direcion the play has gone. Visiting you hub now!
I feel such an Oik, I know that this and all the attendant writings are of really good quality, but even that Charles Shakespeare bloke and his plays and filmscripts and stuff were beyond me.
When it's brought out in a short novel or a comic strip, I promise I'll try again.
I'll Bugger Off now, in case I annoy you any more.
Graphic novel? ... Yes! I like that idea. Annoy us? Ian, we hardly see you! Your as elusive as the Yeti, or his North American cousin Big Foot. You may visit at your leisure, but would love to read your latest once your inclined to release. We know your time is valuable. Always a pleasure to get your visit!
AA Zavala: It is impressive the way that you take complex myths and hone them into such poetic updated renditions of deep truths and modern life.
Thank you, and voted up with everything else too,
Derdriu
Derdriu, Thank you! I felt that using Echo and Narcissus in this way would be interesting. I had alot of fun writing them. The others authors additions have made it memorable as well. Thank you so much for the visit.
The new Part 7 is now published today. Astra Nomik (aka Cathy Nerujen) wrote the bulk of it and came up with most of it all. I did lend a wee hand with some parts and with the photos! We kept to the current swing of things and injected some fun humor in here too. There is another section under way, Augustine! Should be done soon-ish! :D
Cheeky, I wait for bated breath for your hub. I can't wait!
Omg I need a long holiday after writing that long Narcissus hub. Augustine, I see now how time consuming the long hubs and writing of them can be. This is a very strange new experience for me. But as Cassy said, it is now published. "Narcissus in Peril" is the title. I laughed writing the last scene with him hiding inside a closet. That was so funny.
Okay Cassy, your turn to do a narcissus hub. Finish that off quick. Heh. Okay, well faster than I was with mine... :)
Astra, yes, it is alot of work. You have to write the rough draft, let it settle, then come back with revisions. All the humor is mine, and I had 40 post its with notes written on them. I would think of something funny, write it down so that I could use it in the hub. Thank you so much for writing yours. I loved it...
This is going to be quite a challenge, you guys! I am feeling the pressure! Hah! Aw, who am I kidding! I love pressure! I must be nuts! LOL! Augustine, I like the way you do it on Post-it notes! Never thought of that! I use "OneNote" to draft and collect things together on the laptop, then mix it all together there. Cathy is the more traditional type, she does it methodically! Anyway, I am already well under way! This will be moi next hub! Gonna be a wow time writing this!
Cassy, we're honored that you would participate. You and Cathy have taken it up a notch. I know yours will be good.
Yes, I use post-it notes because I think of funny things all the time, but never write them down. I do now, and can use them to add to a story or a poem later. You'll do fine, I know it!
What a masterpiece and I now look forward to many more by you
Take care and enjoy your day.
Eddy.
Eiddwen, they're coming soon. Thank you so much for the visit!
Narcissus is coming soon! Please be patient as he gets into even more trouble.... ! LOL!
Cassie, I can't wait! I already have my Coke Zero's chilled amd window shopping for caramel apples as I read this. Take your time, this is going to be your opus extraordinare. I can feel it.
Oh no, pressure building - curtains drawing open... oh dang it's just morning time here! LOL!
Yes it is nearly ready to come out of the oven, if ya get moi drift! :) Caramel apples and cokes! Wow! What, no popcorn and nachos? ^,^
Cassy, I'm making popcorn nachos right now! How did you know? Right, my "Open Window" hub....
I will be here waiting. I'm actually giggling in anticipation. Giggling I say!
Twilight Lawns Level 7 Commenter 10 months ago
Soft porn. You should be ashamed of yourself (if you don't continue in a similar vein).
I'm off to read part one,